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 Libraries like pthreads were developed for C, and the Solaris operating-system switched from user (JDK 1.1~\cite{JDK1.1}) to kernel threads.
 As a result, languages like Java, Scala, Objective-C~\cite{obj-c-book}, \CCeleven~\cite{C11}, and C\#~\cite{Csharp} adopt the 1:1 kernel-threading model, with a variety of presentation mechanisms.
-From 2000 onwards, languages like Go~\cite{Go}, Erlang~\cite{Erlang}, Haskell~\cite{Haskell}, D~\cite{D}, and \uC~\cite{uC++,uC++book} have championed the M:N user-threading model, and many user-threading libraries have appeared~\cite{Qthreads,MPC,BoostThreads}, including putting green threads back into Java~\cite{Quasar}.
+From 2000 onwards, languages like Go~\cite{Go}, Erlang~\cite{Erlang}, Haskell~\cite{Haskell}, D~\cite{D}, and \uC~\cite{uC++,uC++book} have championed the M:N user-threading model, and many user-threading libraries have appeared~\cite{Qthreads,MPC,Marcel}, including putting green threads back into Java~\cite{Quasar}.
 The main argument for user-level threading is that they are lighter weight than kernel threads (locking and context switching do not cross the kernel boundary), so there is less restriction on programming styles that encourage large numbers of threads performing medium work-units to facilitate load balancing by the runtime~\cite{Verch12}.
 As well, user-threading facilitates a simpler concurrency approach using thread objects that leverage sequential patterns versus events with call-backs~\cite{vonBehren03}.
@@ -327,9 +327,9 @@
 
 Finally, it is important for a language to provide safety over performance \emph{as the default}, allowing careful reduction of safety for performance when necessary.
-Two concurrency violations of this philosophy are \emph{spurious wakeup} and \emph{barging}, i.e., random wakeup~\cite[\S~8]{Buhr05a} and signals-as-hints~\cite[\S~8]{Buhr05a}, where one is a consequence of the other, i.e., once there is spurious wakeup, signals-as-hints follows.
+Two concurrency violations of this philosophy are \emph{spurious wakeup} (random wakeup~\cite[\S~8]{Buhr05a}) and \emph{barging} (signals-as-hints~\cite[\S~8]{Buhr05a}), where one is a consequence of the other, i.e., once there is spurious wakeup, signals-as-hints follows.
 However, spurious wakeup is \emph{not} a foundational concurrency property~\cite[\S~8]{Buhr05a}, it is a performance design choice.
 Similarly, signals-as-hints is often a performance decision.
 We argue removing spurious wakeup and signals-as-hints makes concurrent programming significantly safer because it removes local non-determinism and matches with programmer expectation.
-(Authors experience teaching concurrency is that students are highly confused by these semantics.)
+(Author experience teaching concurrency is that students are highly confused by these semantics.)
 Clawing back performance, when local non-determinism is unimportant, should be an option not the default.
 
@@ -367,6 +367,5 @@
 \section{Stateful Function}
 
-The generator/coroutine provides a stateful function, which is an old idea~\cite{Conway63,Marlin80} that is new again~\cite{C++20Coroutine19}.
-A stateful function allows execution to be temporarily suspended and later resumed, e.g., plugin, device driver, finite-state machine.
+The stateful function is an old idea~\cite{Conway63,Marlin80} that is new again~\cite{C++20Coroutine19}, where execution is temporarily suspended and later resumed, e.g., plugin, device driver, finite-state machine.
 Hence, a stateful function may not end when it returns to its caller, allowing it to be restarted with the data and execution location present at the point of suspension.
 This capability is accomplished by retaining a data/execution \emph{closure} between invocations.
@@ -543,5 +542,5 @@
 \end{figure}
 
-For generators, coroutines, and threads, many designs are based on function objects or pointers~\cite{Butenhof97, C++14, MS:VisualC++, BoostCoroutines15}.
+Stateful functions appear as generators, coroutines, and threads, where presentations are based on function objects or pointers~\cite{Butenhof97, C++14, MS:VisualC++, BoostCoroutines15}.
 For example, Python presents generators as a function object:
 \begin{python}
@@ -587,10 +586,10 @@
 
 Figure~\ref{f:FibonacciAsymmetricGenerator} shows an unbounded asymmetric generator for an infinite sequence of Fibonacci numbers written in C and \CFA, with a simple C implementation for the \CFA version.
-This kind of generator is an \emph{output generator}, producing a new result on each resumption.
+This generator is an \emph{output generator}, producing a new result on each resumption.
 To compute Fibonacci, the previous two values in the sequence are retained to generate the next value, \ie @fn1@ and @fn@, plus the execution location where control restarts when the generator is resumed, \ie top or middle.
-An additional requirement is the ability to create an arbitrary number of generators (of any kind), \ie retaining state in global variables is insufficient;
+An additional requirement is the ability to create an arbitrary number of generators (of any kind), \ie retaining one state in global variables is insufficient;
 hence, state is retained in a closure between calls.
 Figure~\ref{f:CFibonacci} shows the C approach of manually creating the closure in structure @Fib@, and multiple instances of this closure provide multiple Fibonacci generators.
-The C version only has the middle execution state because the top execution state becomes declaration initialization.
+The C version only has the middle execution state because the top execution state is declaration initialization.
 Figure~\ref{f:CFAFibonacciGen} shows the \CFA approach, which also has a manual closure, but replaces the structure with a custom \CFA @generator@ type.
 This generator type is then connected to a function that \emph{must be named \lstinline|main|},\footnote{
@@ -668,5 +667,5 @@
 As well, the data state is small, where variables @byte@ and @msg@ are communication variables for passing in message bytes and returning the message, and variables @lnth@, @crc@, and @sum@ are local variable that must be retained between calls and are manually hoisted into the generator type.
 % Manually, detecting and hoisting local-state variables is easy when the number is small.
-Finally, the execution state is large, with one @resume@ and seven @suspend@s.
+In contrast, the execution state is large, with one @resume@ and seven @suspend@s.
 Hence, the key benefits of the generator are correctness, safety, and maintenance because the execution states are transcribed directly into the programming language rather than using a table-driven approach.
 Because FSMs can be complex and occur frequently in important domains, direct support of the generator is crucial in a systems programming-language.
@@ -780,5 +779,5 @@
 Figure~\ref{f:CFAPingPongGen} shows a symmetric generator, where the generator resumes another generator, forming a resume/resume cycle.
 (The trivial cycle is a generator resuming itself.)
-This control flow is similar to recursion for functions, but without stack growth.
+This control flow is similar to recursion for functions but without stack growth.
 The steps for symmetric control-flow are creating, executing, and terminating the cycle.
 Constructing the cycle must deal with definition-before-use to close the cycle, \ie, the first generator must know about the last generator, which is not within scope.
@@ -789,5 +788,5 @@
 Terminating the cycle is accomplished by @suspend@ or @return@, both of which go back to the stack frame that started the cycle (program main in the example).
 The starting stack-frame is below the last active generator because the resume/resume cycle does not grow the stack.
-Also, since local variables are not retained in the generator function, it does not contain an objects with destructors that must be called, so the  cost is the same as a function return.
+Also, since local variables are not retained in the generator function, it does not contain any objects with destructors that must be called, so the  cost is the same as a function return.
 Destructor cost occurs when the generator instance is deallocated, which is easily controlled by the programmer.
 
@@ -1220,5 +1219,5 @@
 Hence, the starter coroutine is remembered on the first resume and ending the coroutine resumes the starter.
 Figure~\ref{f:ProdConsRuntimeStacks} shows this semantic by the dashed lines from the end of the coroutine mains: @prod@ starts @cons@ so @cons@ resumes @prod@ at the end, and the program main starts @prod@ so @prod@ resumes the program main at the end.
-For other scenarios, it is always possible to devise a solution with additional programming effort.
+For other scenarios, it is always possible to devise a solution with additional programming effort, such as forcing the cycle forward (backward) to a safe point before starting termination.
 
 The producer/consumer example does not illustrate the full power of the starter semantics because @cons@ always ends first.
@@ -1290,5 +1289,5 @@
 The function definitions ensures there is a statically-typed @main@ function that is the starting point (first stack frame) of a coroutine, and a mechanism to get (read) the currently executing coroutine handle.
 The @main@ function has no return value or additional parameters because the coroutine type allows an arbitrary number of interface functions with corresponding arbitrary typed input/output values versus fixed ones.
-The advantage of this approach is that users can easily create different types of coroutines, \eg changing the memory layout of a coroutine is trivial when implementing the @get_coroutine@ function, and possibly redefining @suspend@ and @resume@.
+The advantage of this approach is that users can easily create different types of coroutines, \eg changing the memory layout of a coroutine is trivial when implementing the @get_coroutine@ function, and possibly redefining \textsf{suspend} and @resume@.
 
 The \CFA custom-type @coroutine@ implicitly implements the getter and forward declarations for the coroutine main.
@@ -1338,5 +1337,5 @@
 Once allocated, a VLS is fixed sized.}
 on the allocating stack, provided the allocating stack is large enough.
-For a VLS stack allocation, allocation/deallocation is an inexpensive adjustment of the stack point, modulo any stack constructor costs (\eg initial frame setup).
+For a VLS stack allocation/deallocation is an inexpensive adjustment of the stack pointer, modulo any stack constructor costs (\eg initial frame setup).
 For heap stack allocation, allocation/deallocation is an expensive heap allocation (where the heap can be a shared resource), modulo any stack constructor costs.
 With heap stack allocation, it is also possible to use a split (segmented) stack calling-convention, available with gcc and clang, so the stack is variable sized.
@@ -1363,7 +1362,7 @@
 However, coroutines are a stepping stone towards concurrency.
 
-The transition to concurrency, even for a single thread with multiple stacks, occurs when coroutines context switch to a \newterm{scheduling coroutine}, introducing non-determinism from the coroutine perspective~\cite[\S~3,]{Buhr05a}\cite{Adya02}.
+The transition to concurrency, even for a single thread with multiple stacks, occurs when coroutines context switch to a \newterm{scheduling coroutine}, introducing non-determinism from the coroutine perspective~\cite[\S~3,]{Buhr05a}.
 Therefore, a minimal concurrency system requires coroutines \emph{in conjunction with a nondeterministic scheduler}.
-The resulting execution system now follows a cooperative threading-model, called \newterm{non-preemptive scheduling}.
+The resulting execution system now follows a cooperative threading-model~\cite{Adya02,libdill}, called \newterm{non-preemptive scheduling}.
 Adding \newterm{preemption} introduces non-cooperative scheduling, where context switching occurs randomly between any two instructions often based on a timer interrupt, called \newterm{preemptive scheduling}.
 While a scheduler introduces uncertain execution among explicit context switches, preemption introduces uncertainty by introducing implicit context switches.
@@ -1424,5 +1423,5 @@
 This semantic ensures a thread is started and stopped exactly once, eliminating some programming error, and scales to multiple threads for basic (termination) synchronization.
 For block allocation to arbitrary depth, including recursion, threads are created/destroyed in a lattice structure (tree with top and bottom).
-Arbitrary topologies are possible using dynamic allocation, allowing threads to outlive their declaration scope, identical to normal dynamically allocating.
+Arbitrary topologies are possible using dynamic allocation, allowing threads to outlive their declaration scope, identical to normal dynamic allocation.
 \begin{cfa}
 MyTask * factory( int N ) { ... return `anew( N )`; } $\C{// allocate heap-based threads, implicit start after construction}$
@@ -1525,8 +1524,7 @@
 \subsection{Mutual Exclusion}
 
-A group of instructions manipulating a specific instance of shared data that must be performed atomically is called an (individual) \newterm{critical-section}~\cite{Dijkstra65}.
-The generalization is called a \newterm{group critical-section}~\cite{Joung00}, where multiple tasks with the same session may use the resource simultaneously, but different sessions may not use the resource simultaneously.
+A group of instructions manipulating a specific instance of shared data that must be performed atomically is called a \newterm{critical section}~\cite{Dijkstra65}, which is enforced by \newterm{simple mutual-exclusion}.
+The generalization is called a \newterm{group critical-section}~\cite{Joung00}, where multiple tasks with the same session use the resource simultaneously and different sessions are segregated, which is enforced by \newterm{complex mutual-exclusion} providing the correct kind and number of threads using a group critical-section.
 The readers/writer problem~\cite{Courtois71} is an instance of a group critical-section, where readers share a session but writers have a unique session.
-\newterm{Mutual exclusion} enforces the correct kind and number of threads using a critical section.
 
 However, many solutions exist for mutual exclusion, which vary in terms of performance, flexibility and ease of use.
@@ -1548,5 +1546,5 @@
 Preventing or detecting barging is an involved challenge with low-level locks, which is made easier through higher-level constructs.
 This challenge is often split into two different approaches: barging avoidance and prevention.
-Algorithms that unconditionally releasing a lock for competing threads to acquire use barging avoidance during synchronization to force a barging thread to wait.
+Algorithms that unconditionally releasing a lock for competing threads to acquire use barging avoidance during synchronization to force a barging thread to wait;
 algorithms that conditionally hold locks during synchronization, \eg baton-passing~\cite{Andrews89}, prevent barging completely.
 
